You have a good topic and nice natural approach here. Your focus on asking oneself questions is a good one.
You seem to veer off topic when you mention projective structuring. This complex concept would be better address as an entire paper topic for this assignment. You might be better off not bringing it in at all. If you need to bring it in here, you have to really slow down and transition into defining it, relating it to the issue of asking yourself questions, and then transition back to the "asking oneself questions" topic.
I am not getting a clear enough picture of how asking oneself questions out loud helps one realize mistakes? You say it does, but I don't quite see what you mean. Are you talking about reading back over your paper out loud? Please slow down and spell out very clearly what is being done out loud and exactly what stage(s) of the writing process the "out loud" model effects. What does it help? What do you mean by "mistakes"? When in the writing process does Perl say writers should ask themselves things or read aloud? When did Perl have them do it in her study? What exactly happened in the study? What were people asked to do and what did she learn from it?
In the end, is "doing things out loud" really related enough to your thesis about "asking oneself questions"? If so, make the relationship between them more apparent. If not, get rid of one and focus completely on JUST the one thing you think is most important, and do that one thing deep attentive justice.
Also, be careful of how you introduce quotes. Who is speaking and where//what article or book?
You have a good topic and nice natural approach here. Your focus on asking oneself questions is a good one.
ReplyDeleteYou seem to veer off topic when you mention projective structuring. This complex concept would be better address as an entire paper topic for this assignment. You might be better off not bringing it in at all. If you need to bring it in here, you have to really slow down and transition into defining it, relating it to the issue of asking yourself questions, and then transition back to the "asking oneself questions" topic.
I am not getting a clear enough picture of how asking oneself questions out loud helps one realize mistakes? You say it does, but I don't quite see what you mean. Are you talking about reading back over your paper out loud? Please slow down and spell out very clearly what is being done out loud and exactly what stage(s) of the writing process the "out loud" model effects. What does it help? What do you mean by "mistakes"? When in the writing process does Perl say writers should ask themselves things or read aloud? When did Perl have them do it in her study? What exactly happened in the study? What were people asked to do and what did she learn from it?
In the end, is "doing things out loud" really related enough to your thesis about "asking oneself questions"? If so, make the relationship between them more apparent. If not, get rid of one and focus completely on JUST the one thing you think is most important, and do that one thing deep attentive justice.
Also, be careful of how you introduce quotes. Who is speaking and where//what article or book?